Hey, guys! I know it's been a while since I've published anything. Sorry about the long delay. I had some stuff going on in my life that took me away from my writing. This particular story also ended up being a lot longer than I originally planned, so it took longer to write than some of my previous works. That being said, I'm really, really happy with how it turned out. I actually think it's one of the best age regression stories I've written so far, but I'm obviously a bit biased. You'll have to judge for yourself. ;) As always, I'd greatly appreciate any positive reviews on Amazon. Enjoy!
Undercover Best Friend: A Tale of Age Regression
Tired of being overlooked and underappreciated, Allison Parker, a young
petite police officer, eagerly jumps at an opportunity to prove her
worth. However, the undercover operation for which she volunteers turns
out to be a lot more than she bargained for when she finds out she's
headed back to grade school...as a student! Tasked with befriending the
daughter of a ruthless crime lord, Allison finds herself trapped in the
life of a little girl as she struggles to navigate her way through a
childish landscape filled with homework, bullies, dolls, sleepovers and a
seemingly never-ending barrage of embarrassing outfits. Can she complete her mission and
reclaim her adulthood or is she doomed to repeat most of her childhood?
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I've read through the story once-- to be fair, it going to take a few more read throughs in order to get a better feeling for the story.
ReplyDeleteHowever, here are some initial impressions:
The story is well written, and there is good insight in to the characters thoughts and feelings about her situation.
Many times in stories like these the author seems to be in a hurry to get to the next humiliating situation or outfit without examining the impact or getting a real feel for what the character is going through internally. That's not the case here.
My biggest gripe would be choice of plot-- my feeling is that the best age regression stories include a comparison-- before and after. In order to do that effectively the character must interact with her former adult world AND the people she knows-- only now reduced to a child's status.
She has to interact with her friends and other people her knew her as an adult but now see her as child. They have to witness her fall and comment on it, and then we have to have the characters reactions and feelings.
If the character is off in a strange place that she doesn't know and surrounded by people who don't know her, its like 180 degrees of the story is walled off-- it just comes off as rather hollow.
Now your plot of this story tends to preclude all that-- but there are ways around it to include the elements I mention yet keep the basic story intact.
In any case, I just feel that that the best age regression stories have the character interacting with her former adult world and give a compare and contrast of what has been lost and how she and friends react to it.
I did enjoy the story and feel you are very talented.
I just bought it
ReplyDeleteLoved it
My only and ONLY suggestion
Is that I want a directors cut with the plastic surgeon actually coming in
That would be brilliant
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Haven't read this one yet, so I don't have anything to say about that, but I can say that the typography on your cover for Undercover Best Friend is reminiscent of PowerPoint Word Art from the '90s. You want might to redo that with a nice solid color because that gradient overlay makes your book look cheap and amateurish.
ReplyDeleteI saw that you revised your cover. The dark yellow text with a large blue outer glow is an unfortunate combination. Try not to get too creative with the filters. Less is more. Here is my suggestion:
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I think you should split "Undercover Best Friend" into two lines because it's really hard to read when squished into one (especially at the thumbnail size Amazon shows to customers on related titles). You don't have to worry so much about people reading "A tale of age regression" as this description is duplicated in the title.
Anyway, best of luck with whatever you decide to go with. I think you've done a good job on creating your covers. The choices you've made for the fonts and filters on a few books could've been better.
The juxtaposition of the two girls in Reform School Swap gives us an idea of what this story is about, but that text between them isn't as nice. Whatever stylistic filters you put on it make the text less legible. A solid color with no excess anything would be better.
The text on Back to School is fine, no real complaints.
A Race Back in Time is decent. The text could've been made a bit clearer.
The Sunflower Girls, repeats this pattern. Nice cover, but there were better choices to be made on the typography.
I like what you've done with The House at the Edge of Town and Wish Upon a Star, however, these may have hurt your sales as I'm not sure they are to-market. You probably could've sold more copies by putting a youngish girl on the cover. That's going to catch the eye of someone browsing Amazon more than the house on haunted hill vibe.
I bought and read both Undercover Best friend and Reform School Swap. I really enjoyed them and I think you are one of the best Age Regression authors. I'll gladly pay to read any more new novels. Keep up the good work!
ReplyDeleteAnother fantastic story, August! Your emphasis on "plausible" age regress storylines coupled with mature and well-edited prose places you leagues apart from most every other ABDL-focused author. Keep up the fantastic work!
ReplyDeleteOn a separate note, I think that you would find much interest in writing a darker alternative ending to this story. The antagonist's ruminations of medical modifications (i.e. babification, though I loathe that term) would definitely strike a note with at least a subset of your readership.
I whole heartedly agree with seeing more medical modifications
ReplyDeleteI would pay again for a “special edition” version with that- I pay for enough dvd special editions lol
Just got around to reading this one, apart from thinking of "silencers" (or suppressors) in a Hollywood movie way, great story
ReplyDeleteWhen u wright the story "Reform School Swap: A Tale of Age Regression" she go to school , her status reduce , then what happen after few year ???
ReplyDeleteLike when I read ur story "The Sunflower Girls - An Age Regression Tale" there is story about what happen after 1 year BUT what about 'Reform School Swap'
I want the end of story of 'Reform School Swap'. PLS wright end of story here ???
Any chance more of this type of story will be coming from you? Love these forced regression/social demotion stories. And you're work is amazing.
ReplyDeleteSecond that!
ReplyDeleteWould you be planning any new publications, August? I hope so!
ReplyDeleteAnyone knows what happened to the author?
ReplyDeleteLast release was last year.
what happen to her ???
ReplyDeleteShould I keep returning to this blog with high hopes?
ReplyDeleteI don't know if you read these comments anymore or if you're done with this I just like you to know you make really good stories and I would love to read new ones
ReplyDeleteI hope you publish something again some day, I love your stories.
ReplyDeletePlease consider writing another story.
ReplyDeleteWhen will the next story be out? I love all of your amazing pieces of work!!!
ReplyDeleteI like AR Story Ps publist next book
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